My Musings: Farewell

Wednesday, 10 June 2009

Farewell

Torn apart in the waves of time
Rusting through the paths I crossed
Entwined in the ghostly bygones
I bid you good bye,Yesterday
Farewell...!

28 comments:

Preeti Shenoy said...: lovely!
But i do feel (purely from a writer's point of view--pls feel free to ignore my honesty) that if you remove the exclamation marks and the extra dots, and make it this way:
Torn apart in the waves of time
Rusting through the paths I crossed
Entwined in the ghostly bygones
I bid you good bye
Yesterday ,Farewell!

I think the above is a more effective way of saying it!
Cheers
preeti; 10 June 2009 10:43
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Preeti:-I 'll go ahead and do it right away..
I have a strange habit of using a lot of dots...:)
thanks for the suggestion:); 10 June 2009 10:45
vimmuuu said...: errr...Im bad at understanding poetry. Blame it on my childhood. But does this mean you are bidding goodbye to blogosphere or that 'yesterday' ? :D; 10 June 2009 11:13
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Vimmuu:-Its just a random thought...u can say im bidding goodbyes to some old ghosts:); 10 June 2009 11:40
Aniket said...: Ah, I've had my fair share of trouble with the dots and exclamation marks.

I can't live with out talking via dots... and the (paranthesis) :D

And yes of course, nice verse btw. Crisp and effective. ;); 10 June 2009 13:02
vimmuuu said...: Ohhhh. Now, I get it ! Good, get rid of those ghosts !; 10 June 2009 14:47
Ki said...: Gets the point across very well in such few words. I enjoyed it :D; 10 June 2009 21:26
chirpy-paaro said...: Nice one!!! You should time to time bid farewell to past ghosts!!; 10 June 2009 21:45
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Aniket:-I know,its become such a habit...and i definitely need to get rid of it soonly:)Thanks for the compliment:); 10 June 2009 22:07
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Vimmuu:-Yes..i am doing it:); 10 June 2009 22:07
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Ki:-Thanks for dropping by...and thanks fo the comment...welcome to the blog:); 10 June 2009 22:07
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Chirpy:-Thanks sweets...yes iam trying very hard...:); 10 June 2009 22:08
Cяystal said...: I hate goodbyes..
But you put it up beautifully!; 11 June 2009 01:19
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Crystal:-Thanks:)...n welcome to the blog; 11 June 2009 02:12
Amal Bose said...: loved reading it..
get those old ghost away :); 11 June 2009 17:28
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Amal:-Thank you for the comment:)...and welcome to the blog:); 11 June 2009 21:46
Devil Incarnate... said...: Loved those words, nicely put together in few words.. :); 12 June 2009 05:04
Pretty Me!! said...: Interesting !!; 12 June 2009 07:06
Adisha said...: Niceee :); 12 June 2009 09:49
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Devil:-Thank you so much:)welcome to my blog:); 12 June 2009 10:10
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Adisha :-Thank you:); 12 June 2009 10:11
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Pretty me:-Thank you:)...welcome to my blog:); 12 June 2009 10:11
BrownPhantom said...: I liked it ..The farwell of everyday that goes un-noticed.
Very well written :); 12 June 2009 10:26
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Brown Phantom:-Thank you so much:); 14 June 2009 06:49
Mayz said...: i loved d analogies u have used...waves n paths...they go so well wid time forgotten n moments gone...loved it!!!

thou frankly m neva lettin ya say goodbye; 14 June 2009 06:53
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Mayz:-Aweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee:)...
dont worry...i wont say bye to u ever...this good bye was only for some old rotten ghosts:); 14 June 2009 10:21
darklordreturns said...: Its beautifully done.. filled with the pathos and sweet tragedy of a "farewell"!; 17 June 2009 07:48
santasizing...Fantasizing said...: @Darklordreturns:-Thank you so much:); 17 June 2009 10:09